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 Taka, Gondara [WIP]

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PostSubject: Taka, Gondara [WIP]   Tue Mar 23, 2010 5:40 pm

Name: Taka, Gondara
Nickname: 'Kumo's Falcon Talon'
Age: 16
Date of Birth: July 1st
Chinese Zodiac: Ox
Gender: Male
Clan: Taka

Looks: He wears a jet black jacket and pants with a thick piece of leather underneath the jacket to help protect him from weapons like Kunai, etc. Over his right eye he wears a black eye patch due to a training incident which resulted in the transplanting of a new eye for him in the Konoha Infirmary which morphed his Falcon's eye into an unheard of version. It's process of receivance is similar to that of the Uchiha's Mangekyou Sharingan. He wears black sandals as well and sometimes sports a bamboo hat to shield his eyes. He's be falsely accused of being part of the Akatsuki for wearing this hat so he rarely wears it anymore. On both of his biceps is a tattoo of his clan's symbol, a sort of star.

Personality: Gondara's personality centers around a confusing portion of his life back when he was seven. His personality tends to reflect upon what happened and causes him to be quiet a good portion of the time.

"The capacity to learn, is a gift; The ability to learn, is a skill; The willingness to learn, is a choice."

Clan Information

(please post this separately in Clan Creation also please. your clan won't be approved with your character, it has to be done aside from this)

Clan Name: Taka
Kekkei Genkai: The Taka clan are all slender people. There havnt been any known members to be overweight. Members are born with any color hair but most are born with black. The clan prefers for all members to wear black but are not forced to. The clan is ruled by a master summoner that is capable of summoning the Falcon King. All members sign the Falcon scroll when they are younger but none are allowed to summon the Falcon King unless they are the Master Summoner. The King wouldnt even assist you if you did.

Members sign the contract when they are young maybe ages 8-10. All members have a different falcon. They first summon them when they are 11 or 12. In the years after that they bond and grow with each other.

Most people don’t know is that the anatomy of these people is much different than that of the most people. The entire bone structure, in a since, is HOLLOW, exactly like that of a birds. Most would think that this would be a disadvantage, and the reason is simple. If bones are hollow they are much easier to break. But the falcon clan's body again has a different body makeup. The chakra system is mostly centered around the human’s circulatory system, and there are in fact so close together that they are mostly one in the same. The falcon clan’s chakra system is focused around the SKELETAL system, and wraps around the bones to strengthen them. With this, there bones are just as strong as any other persons since chakra is CONSTANTLY flowing through them. And remember, birds have hollow bones to make them lighter, thus more agile and making it easier to fly. Of course humans cant fly, but with there hollow bones there are faster and more agile than your average human.
Not only that, but there bloodline trait helps them see with the eyes of a falcon...literally. There eyes will change to a unique color (The color differs from person to person, its unknown why) , with a slit going down the middle in a vertical direction and there vision is enhanced by 12 times. This helps the mind stay focused and see past deception this in turn uses chakra constantly, just as the Byakugan (did I spell that right?) or sharingan does. But they also have another function, just as the Sharingan, once their eyes have reached a certain point of experience, they are able to be used to predict someones movement.
Clan Symbol:

Clan History: The Taka Clan has been housed amongst the mountains above Kumogakure for hundred's of years. The clan is actually getting so big the leader as well as the elders have been considering moving the village to unoccupied territory and setting up a Hidden Village of they're own. The clan has see many a power ninja come from they're midst, some even known to become Legendary nin who fought in the Great Ninja Wars.
Link: Taka Clan

Rank Information
Rank: Jounin
Exile - Kumogakure
Growing Up - Konohagakure
Returning - Kumogakure

Skill Information
Skill Speciality: [He's naturally a master of TaiJutsu due to his clan.]
Main: NinJutsu
Sub: GenJutsu
Elemental Affinity: Raiton & Suiton
Special Characteristics: His bones are hollow which allows him to glide like a bird and move faster than a normal ninja. Some would think having hollow bones would be a weakness for a simple reason, hollow bones are easier to break. However, Gondara's chakra system is not centered around his organs, instead, it is centered around his skeletal system, making his bones just as strong, if not stronger than that of normal ninja.

Jutsus [Added In Next Post.]

(remember: only S ranked characters may have their own style. all other characters must have an approved style or none until they can learn it)

Name: 'External'
Type: TaiJutsu
Rank: A
Element: None-Elemented
Description: An 'External' martial arts style is a fighting style which is characterized by the focus on fast, explosive movements and developing the practitioner's physical strength and agility. Training regimes for external styles focus around the practitioner's muscular power, speed and application, developing their muscle memory and their stamina, building it all up to the desired 'hard' physical level for real combat.

Name: 'Current'
Type: NinJutsu
Rank: A
Element: Raiton
Description: Due to Gondara having hollow bones and an affinity for Raiton, he is able to channel Raiton into his bones and let this reactive abilities, radiate from his body. Doing this, does 2 things. 1. It increases his speed exponentially. 2. It makes his body electrified so if someone touches him, they instantly receive a shock. This shock can be controlled by Gondara using his chakra network which is woven around his skeletal system.

Name: Suiken Ryuu - Drunken Fist Style
Type: TaiJutsu
Rank: C
Element: None-Elemented
Description: Suiken is fighting style utilizing alcohol to loosen the body's muscles and the unstructured movements make the users attacks harder to predict. By being in this drunken state, the user can take more damage without feeling the pain, gain higher agility and provide a natural fluidity to their movements.


Name: Ikazuchi
Appearance: Ikazuchi
Rank: B
Special Abilities: Is forged with a charge of Raiton into it.
Origin: Specially forged for a Jounin involved in the Great Ninja War.

Name: Tori
Appearance: Tori
Rank: C
Special Abilities: None.
Origin: Just a regular Katana forged for a Jounin in the Great Ninja War.

History and Roleplay Sample
Before The Academy

Konoha Academy

After The Academy

Going Blind

The New Power

The Chunin Exams

Combination of Elements: The Utilization of a New Jutsu.

Returning To Kumo

Rp Sample:
Gondara was laying in his bed that morning, slightly awake, but mostly asleep when along came a knocking on his window. He didn't even move a single muscle, he could have cared less about what it was, he was too tired too care. The knocking went on for a moment before it stopped abruptly. "Finally....." He said, quickly followed by a crash as his window slammed open and a bird flopped down on to his floor. Again, Gondara didn't move a muscle to this. When the bird got back up, it hopped onto his bed and look at Gondara. "Damnit Ichi...I was sleeping for god's sake...." He said irritably as he rolled back over and covered his head with his pillow. "Gondy, just get up." "Why...It's not like anything is going to happen today...Just let me sleep..." Ichi just dropped his little head and shook it. "You finally got assigned to a squad..." Gondara didn't make a verbal response, he just chunked his pillow at the bird, knocking him off the bed as Gondara sat up. "GAH! Was that really necessary?" "Yes...It was..." He said moving to the edge of the bed, stretching.

"Alright...I'm up....What are they're names..." He mutter, standing up and walking over to his closet. "Well...Thats the thing, right now it only has one other member, a girl, and no teacher, for now that is." "Okay...So then what's the girls name..." "It looks like...Gina, Haru." Gondara didn't respond, all he did was pull on his regular black jacket, shirt, pants, and sandals. His clan was well known for wearing trademark black clothing, each one having the mark of the clan on it. One he had his clothes on, he grabbed his eye patch from his bed-side table and put it over his scared and closed right eye. "Well, all I gotta do now is grab my swords and the scroll and I'm out of here. Guess I'll head over to Ichiraku's, see what people are hanging out over there today." "Okay seriously Gondy...Why do you have to carry that scroll around with you everywhere you go?" "Yea, you really think I'm gonna leave this scroll just laying around?" Ichi did not respond.

Gondara headed down stairs and grabbed his two Katana's off his wall and strapped them to his upper back, each of the hilts appearing over each of his shoulders. He then walked over to the other side of the room and picked up some green rope that was laying next to his fathers scroll, and tied it around his waist. Grabbing the large, over-sized scroll, much like those Summoning Contract Scrolls, he attached it to his lower back using the rope. Once he had rully attached it, he adjusted his eye patch and walked out his front door. He looked up and down the street trying to decide where to go until he finally decided to head to Ichiraku's for breakfast. So, he turned left and started heading up the street until he got there. Pushing aside the curtain, he poked his head in. "Meso pork ramen please!" He then sat down two seats away from a girl and a boy who both looked to be about the same age as him.

Last edited by ~*NatSirT-TheTrueGod*~ on Sat Mar 27, 2010 2:07 pm; edited 3 times in total
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PostSubject: Re: Taka, Gondara [WIP]   Tue Mar 23, 2010 7:22 pm



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PostSubject: Re: Taka, Gondara [WIP]   Wed Mar 24, 2010 1:05 am

There are a couple of things I can see that need to be tweaked.

-In order to have a D+ Ranked weapon, you must have Weaponry as a speciality.
-You can only have two specialities.
-Please add a little more length to your Academy and Returning to Kumo arcs please. As a Jounin you must have a very long story to tell.

Other than those things, everything looks good~
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PostSubject: Re: Taka, Gondara [WIP]   Wed Mar 24, 2010 4:17 pm

Amiya~ wrote:
Appearance: (provide a detailed insight of how the weapon looks like. a picture would help, but it is not needed)
Rank: (this may not exceed the rank of your character, remember)
Special Abilities: (if the weapon is special in any way, provide how it is here)
Origin: (give us the history of this weapon, how your character received it and if any modifications were made to this weapon. everything counts)

And no where else does it say on the site that you must have a weapon specialty.

Amiya~ wrote:
Skill Information
Skill Speciality: (this is where you state what specialities your character have. Ninjutsu, Genjutsu, Taijutsu, Puppetry, Medical Ninjutsu and Fuuinjutsu are all forms of this)
Elemental Affinity: (what element are your jutsus? Katon, Raiton, Douton, Suiton or Fuuton?)
Special Characteristics: (these abilities are unique to your character. we allow things like a longer stamina, or slightly more nimble than other ninja *please note: there has to be a reason for being like this*)

You also did not list it here.

Keitaro Uchiha wrote:

Skill Speciality:
Main: nin

Name:double scythe
Rank: C-B
Special Abilities:when swung a large gust of wind shoots out you can all so put lightning through it
Origin: The scythe was passed down through uchiha to uchiha it was used by the founder and now it is passed down to keitaro the reason it was passed down was simply because it seemed to help every soon to be new clan leader live to see the day they become leader the founder used it in his fight for hokage he may have lost but he lived keitaro used it to help escape the missing ninja that killed his first team

Also, you made no comment's what-so-ever about Kei's C-B Ranked Scythe, regardless if it was already approved or not. Kthxbai.

P.S. History Updated.

P.S.S. Drunken Fist Style Added at Kei's request.
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PostSubject: Re: Taka, Gondara [WIP]   Thu Mar 25, 2010 4:16 pm

you leave my damn scythe out of this and approved
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PostSubject: Re: Taka, Gondara [WIP]   Thu Mar 25, 2010 4:55 pm

Un approved if you wish to be Jounin i want to see you work harder. Make all of your history longer, or else
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